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When your hungry you do what you have to do for food especially when your mother is a drug addict and my little brother is crying because he is hungry. I'd move heaven and Earth for my little brother Ryland. I try to keep him out of the house away from her but when I have to go get food, I leave him at home so he doesn't get in the way.
I know what you're thinking, "why don't I get a job?" Well I have one, but it doesn't pay enough to get food all the time. Ryland was hungry so I ran to a convenient store grabbed a few things but not before the store owner saw me steal the food and start to shoot.
I can hear my mom screaming at Ryland outside of the house. He's too young to be putting up with her bull crap so I take off running inside to diffuse this situation. Apparently she thought he was doing his homework too slowly, which is funny considering she is a drop out that didn't bother finishing because she was already addicted to drugs. After I send her away and feed Ryland, I help him with his homework and get him ready for bed. You're probably wondering where our father is? Yeah well get in line because I want to know the answer as well. Mom won't tell us who he is.
The next day, I walk into the kitchen to be stopped by several police officers sitting at the table. Crap, I think they are here to bust me for stealing. I'm taken by surprise when they say they here because they want to investigate for child neglect. I don't want them to arrest mom. While sometimes I think she is Satan reincarnated, she is the reason my brother and I get to stay together. I lie my ass off to the police about what happens in our house hold. I can take care of Ryland until he is older.
Once the police seem satisfied with what they have heard, they leave and I go hunt Ryland down to feed him. At dinner he tells me everyone is laughing at how old his shoes are. I mentally put it on the list of things he needs.
I went to the grocery store with what little money that I had on Friday. On my walk to the store I saw a beautiful pair of shoes I know Ryland would love. I'm 25 dollars too short to buy them. So I go to what I know I have to do if I want him to have them.
I went into the shoe store, found Ryland's size, hid them close to the door, and set off to make a distraction. I "tripped" over my own feet, hit a shelf, and knocked the whole thing down sending shoes flying. As the store owner checks on me, then the other costumers, I make my way for the door, grab the shoes and take off running. I hid the shoes before I went to the grocery store.
On my way home, I grab the shoes, groceries in hand, and take the long way that doesn't go near the shoe store. The light in Ryland's eye when he sees his new shoes is the reason I will steal if I have too. His happiness means the world to me.
Author's Note: I had to take sometime to think how I could use the story The Story of The Summoner. In that story the summoner decides to steal money from who ever he can. On his journey, he meets a man. After questioning the man of his identity, the summoner finds out that he is really the devil. The two agree that they will steal everything they can from whoever. I knew after reading this story I had two elements to work with. Stealing and the Devil. I used stealing as the main element in my story. I bet you noticed that my character didn't have a name. I noticed that about half way through and decided to leave it that way. I wanted him to have motivation for his stealing rather than out of greed. You might have noticed I referred to his mom as Satan. I tried to have him have his own devil in his life. I liked writing this story. Stories like these make me want to keep writing and make t story more elaborate. I just somewhat let it flow rather than planning it out. Let me know what you think!\
Bibliography: The Chaucer Story Book by Eva March Tappan (1908).
Hi Michelle! Wow, what a story! It was so emotional. I did not read the original story, but now I am intrigued to do so. The only thing that I noticed when I was reading your story is at the very end of your author's note. The second to last sentence you left out a few letters of the word "the" and also the very last sentence you added a backslash symbol. Those were the only things that caught my attention that you may want to look at. I really enjoyed your story! Well done.
ReplyDeleteHi Michelle, I agree with LaDawn. Your story is very emotional to read and is a very emotional topic in general. It was interesting how you pulled out two topics from your original story and made them your own this week! Very creative! I would recommend that you proofread your story before posting them though, you had pretty consistent grammar errors throughout the story! Other than that it was a nice story. Good job!
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ReplyDeletewow that was a really good story it hit me right in the feels. I have a little brother that i would do any thing for so i felt like i could really relate to this story. luckily I still have my dad so i dont have to steal things for him. but if the situation called for it i might.
Hi Michelle,
ReplyDeleteYou did a really good job with the story! I have to agree with others in that this was a very emotional story to read. I do not have any siblings, but I would image that if I did I would do anything for them like the brother in this story. You did a really good job of playing up emotions that people would connect with therefore making it very relatable. You're doing a good job and I look forward to seeing your other writings this semester.
Once again, GREAT story! This was emotional. I lost my brother in 2008 and would've done anything for him. And viewing other comments, it looks like you wrote the story in such a way that all of your readers could relate to it in some way. That's not an easy thing to do, so good job! Your writing style is easy and comfortable to read, which I really appreciate. Great job!!
ReplyDeleteHi Michelle! Good job with your story! I think it was a nice modern adaptation of a Chaucer tale. I will echo others comments on your tale in that it hits close to home due to a familial tie. Honestly, I thought that your nameless main character was female until I read your author's note! Other than that, my only suggestion would be to do a proofread before publishing your blog post, since I saw a few errors at the beginning of your tale. But overall, good job!
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